This is VERY good for a first. There are some things that could have been improved though.
-The smudging around the render is poor and doesn't look good with the render. I would not have smudged it
-Render placement is not the best, as it seems to leave a lot of empty space to the right
-Text is surprisingly good for a first
-Decent flow created with the green C4D IMO.
Since you are a beginner, this is all I shall say for now. I look forward to seeing more from you in the future and the biggest advice I can give you is to look at tutorials. They help you learn the program and find new skills/styles. And always remember to practice

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